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Dark Shine High!!
based in a high school called Dark Shine there is 6 main charcters that noramly don't see eye to eye but they most become friends to help the school as there is werid things that happen every night .
such as monsters, demons, ghosts, gouls and the white shine leader just might wont the students to help him in his path to take of the planet of Kessene.
yes this school is for students who have dark shine powers but there not the bad guys unless they use there powers in the wrong way and turn there powers in to the white shine.
anyways the school only take on students who have the dark shine oral this is the heart of there powers but not all the students know there true kick ass powers as they are different for anyone as u can have the power of fire, ice, water, earth, mind, sword or the spear and it depens on the students oral as it will come to them in different way so not all the students know what there true power is.
so what will ur power be!
Characters
Ruki (aged 18)
Sukio (aged 16)
Osamu (aged 17)
Li Li (aged 16)
Mei (aged 17)
Himiko (aged 19)
Master Yi (N/A)
White Shine Lord Liang (N/A) (evil)
Diao (N/A) (evil)
Liu (N/A) (evil)
Characters details
Ruki: he is 18 and he is very smart and always well dressed and is very shy when it cmes to girls but will Mei change that, he is 5ft 10" with jet black hair and his dark shine power is mind as he is smart and he doesnt no yet but soon can mind conrtol and move objects also Sukio is his little sister they have always bin there for one and other ever from there mother died there he was 4.
Sukio: she is 16 and she looks up to her big as he is the only 1 that as looked after her but will she always think like that, she is not as smart as her older brother but she will stronger than him he dark shine power as she is the strongest in the group is fire and soon will be able to control fires, and she has a inner power the power of the dragon which ones was the keeper of the sky will she use it for good or evil
Osamu: he is the last and youngest of the boys but what he lacks in age makes up for in skill with the sword and spear he is the stongest in head to head combat but not in the group as he thinks he is the strongest in the group.is very big headed and always thinks he is the best at everthing and doesn't get on with Ruki.
Li Li: she is the youngest of the group as she truned 16 two days before she went to Dark Shine High she is a bit oh a out cast of the group and she is very quiet and is very good freinds with ruki but am sure she wonts to be more, her dark shine power is the power of water and soon can call upon the seas to help and also maybe floods or even drouths.
Mei: she is the possative and warmhearted and she secrtcly loves Ruki but she thinks that he is in love with Li Li as they are very good friends but she knows Li Li wonts to be much more, she is 17 and will always try and take the most mature path every time, her dark shine power is the power of earth she can cause earthquakes rock falls and even trun in to the spirt of the forset.
Himiko: she is the oldest of the group and is very pretty but is there inmature and some times acts like the youngest of the group she is always very loud and very spoiled by her rich parents but she can't have everythin she wants but she has got cold blood and a kiss of ice and she cant always control herself to use her powers as she is not there mature, her power is ice and can call a blizzard or maybe even freeze u if she wants to.
Master Yi: he is the teacher at Dark Shine and has mastered every dark shine power there is to learn as he teaches the students at the school and once was in the same class as the White Lord and they was very good friends but took different paths in life as Master Yi choice to teach people to learn the dark shine in the way of good, he is unknow to everyone and noone hows there he was born or came from.
White Shine Lord Liang: this is the white lord the leader of the white shine and is the most powerfulest person or demon every to walk upon the land of Kessene believed to be half human half demon, he has many demons, ghosts, ghouls, monsters and even humans under his command but his two main officers are Diao and Liu.
Diao: this is a office of the White Lord she is very beautiful and is excelling in the martail arts and unrivaled in archery she is known to be a little reckless.
Liu: this human/demon is highly trusted by the White Lord this half human half demon is a mster of the sword and spear and has never lost a battle but also is the White Lord master of strategy.
hope u enjoyed readin this!!!!
what happend to dark shine
what happend to dark shine high???
"people do not need violence to solve there problems."
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"people do not need violence to solve there problems."
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when you next one comming out?
"people do not need violence to solve there problems."
It is really good, i hope
add me please
"people do not need violence to solve there problems."
hey
do you know when you will make the next one?
"people do not need violence to solve there problems."
wow a new episode
that's not a long wait at all... enjoying reading it keep it up!!
it would be nice if you can post the new chpater as a new post :) easier to follow and look for in the forum as well
wow a new episode
that's not a long wait at all... enjoying reading it keep it up!!
it would be nice if you can post the new chpater as a new post :) easier to follow and look for in the forum as well
Episode 1 the meeting
Dark Shine High
Episode 1
"The Meeting"
it's 09:30 on a november morning it's snowing outside and as a gust of wind passes a old man walking down the road some snow falls of some surroundin trees then the old man stops and looks up and a bedroom window and walks down to the front door and knocks.
there stand a fithteen year old girl in a dressing robe the old man asks to come in so the girl lets the old man in from out of the cold .
the old man walks in and makes him self at home the young girl looks surprised
Li Li: hey what do u think your doing
the old man just looks at her and laughs.
Li Li: w..whats so damn funny and what do u wont
Old Man: oh nothing i want you to go and get dressed and then i will tell u why i am here.
Li Li: WHO THE HELL DO YOU THINK YOU ARE!!!
the old man looks at the the girl in shock and rises his right hand and mubles to her
Old Man: Go and get dressed
then he lowers his hand and next second the girl starts walking upstairs to get dressed
(5 minutes later)
Li Li walks down the stairs dressed
Old Man: thats better now sit down Li Li
Li Li: Who are you, how do you know my name
Old Man: i am Master Yi, Master of Dark Shine High and i now everything about you Li Li
Li Li: what..what do u now about me how
Master Yi: becasue i been watching you very closely Li Li
Li Li: Oh my god your a perv aren't you get out my house right this second or i will throw you out myself.
Master Yi just sits there and looks at Li Li
Li Li jumps to her feet and goes to grap Master Yi then Yi uses his mind push and pushes Li Li back on to the chair.
Li Li: Ochies that hurt, What why cant i move,What are you doing to me.
Master Yi: i have a power too Li Li, you didnt think you was the only one did you
Li Li: what do you mean a power
Master Yi: i no when you feel sad it rains and when your angry the seas are unclam i can help you learn how to use this power of your, you see am the teacher of Dark Shine High and the school isn't for any normal students it's for speical students such as yourself.
Li Li: you mean there are more people like me
Master Yi: why yes i believe we have 91 students at Dark Shine now an...
Li Li: SO WHY THE HELL ARE YOU HERE JUST TO TELL ME THERES MOVE PEOPLE LIKE ME, AND LET ME GO NOW!
Master Yi: ok i will let you go and no the real rense why am here is to ask you to come to Dark Shine and learn your true power adn why you have it so will you come with me to Dark Shine.
Li Li: i don't know how can i trust you how do i now that your not goin to kid nap me
Yi: hahaha kidnap you why would i do that hahaha oh and you can trust me so what do you say.
Li Li: ermmmm i don't know
Yi: Ok i will let you diecide and if you diecide to come just go to this place.
Master Yi stands up and leaves Li Li a card on the table by the door then opens the door
Yi: I hope to see you very soon Li Li
Master Yi puts his pipe in his mouth and walks off in to the cold street just as he walks out of the door Li Li slams the door and runs to her room
(2 day later 20:23 6th november)
Li Li is in her room looking at the card Master Yi left her
Li Li: there is more people like me so i wasnt the only one i wonder why he has been watchin me..hmmm i dont no what if he is liein
there is a call from down stairs its Li Lis mother Luo
Luo: Li your dinner is ready
Li Li: ok am coming
Li Li just the card on her bed and runs down stairs nearly falling down them and sits at th table
Luo: there you go Li
Li Li: thanks
Li Li graps her food and eats it as fast a she can.
Luo: you most of bin hungry
Li Li: yep thank you
Luo: Li dont you want to talk about your day.
Li Li: no not really i just want to go to bed mother.
Li LI runs up stairs and into her bedroom and slams her door before her mother can shout good night then
she picks up the card and looks at it again
the card reads
Dear Li Li
I really do hope you diecide to come to Dark Shine to learn the true meaings of your powers
If you do diecide to come wait at the bus stop 2 block north of your house at 21:00 on the 7th
Just bring a spare pair of clothes and pen we will give you everthing else
hope to see you soon Li Li
From Master YI
Li Li: its the 7th tomorrow should i go or not?
Its the 7th the time is 20:15
Li Li is writeing a letter to her mother saying mother i have gone to Dark Shine High to learn about my powers its hard to explain but i will when i find out how to explain dont worrie i will be safe and well looked after
i love you Li Li
she packs her back and puts the note on her pillow and looks at the clock 20:27
she climbs out of her bedroom window and goes to climd down the side of her house there she slips and falls in to the snow on the yard
Li Li: Ochies i hope noone heard that
she stands up and rubs the snow off her bum and runs to bus stop 2 blocks down the road
Li Li: i hope am not late
just then the bus comes around the corner Li Li takes one last look at the road she just ran down and gets on the bus
she looks around to she if Master Yi or if anyone else is on the bus then she hears a guy and girls voice coming fom upstairs of the bus
she goes up stairs to see who it is.
Li Li: hey am Li Li she says to the guy and girl
girl: hey am Sukio and this is my brother Ruki
Ruki: h..hey nice to meet you Li..Li
Sukio: Sorry he is really shy when it comes to girls
Ruki: Oi you shut up no am not shy with girls
Ruki starts to blush and trun red Li Li starts to laugh
Ruki just sits there and carrys on workin on his laytop
Sukio: So are you goin to join Dark Shine High to.
Li Li: Yep i didnt no if to come or not
Ruki: i was like that the first time i was goin to go but it really good there am in my second year
Sukio: Oh My God big brother thats the first time you have never paused when saying something to a girl
Ruki: NO ITS NOT AND AM NOT SHY OF GIRLS OK!
Sukio: haha ok so how old are you then Li Li
Li Li: sixteen i just truned three days ago what about you
Sukio: am..
Ruki: am eigthteen
Sukio: i was speaking am sixteen to Li Li
Ruki and Sukio: is it ok if we call you Li
Li Li: yer sure its what me mum calls me
there is a call from down stairs its the bus driver
BusDriver: Oi you kids we are at Dark Shine now so get ur backsides off my bus
Ruki: come on we bet get moving
Sukio: bloody hell he is abit of a moody ass
Li Li : hahahaha yer he is
All three of them run of the bus and into the gates of Dark Shine High
and there at the gates is Mater Yi he waves to the three to come over
Ruki: hi again Master Yi
Yi: hi Ruki, Li Li and Sukio.
There is three other students with Master Yi
Master Yi: Ruki, Li Li and Sukio i would like you to meet the other members to your class this is Osamu
Osamu: Yo hows it goin
Master Yi: this is Mei
Mei: hey there
As Master Yi introdues them to Mei Ruki's jaw drops to the floor and eye popping out of his head
Ruki: h.h..h..h..h..hi there
Sukio: Sorry he is shy when it comes to girl haha
Ruki: NO AM NOT!
Master Yi: ok children calm down now, this is the oldest and last memeber of your class this is Himiko
Himiko: HEEEEEYYYYY!!!
Master Yi: i will leave you lot to get to know each other i expect good things from this class
Master Yi Puts his pipe in and wlks of in to the school mumbeling to hisself
Sukio: am Sukio am sixteen and Ruki is my brother he is eigthteen
Ruki: h..h..hey (looking at Mei)
Li Li: hey am Li Li and am sixteen to wat about you lot
Mei: hahaha am seventeen its very nice to meet you all
Osamu: Yo dudes am seventeen too
Himiko: HEEYYYY AM NINETEEN!!
Osamu winks at Himiko and blows a kiss
Osamu: hey there
Himiko: hahaha hmmm hey
Himiko Walks over to Osamu and grabs him
Himiko: if you do that again you will not have any for me to grab you got that
Osamu YES! (in a highy pitched voice)
Rest of the group: owwwwww thats got to hurt
Himiko skips in to the school singing to herself then Osamu falls to the floor
Ruki helps him to his feet
Ruki: you ok Osamu that look like it hurt
Osamu: owwww, yer it did hurt but oh well see she loves me
Ruki: what why you think that
Osmau: haha she just does
Ruki and Osamu walk into the school followed by Sukio, Li Li and Mei
Sukio: is that girl mad or what
Mei: hmmm what did you say
Sukio: hahaha never mind that.
To be contined!
Epiosde 2 "White Shine"
Dark Shine High
Episode 2
"White Shine"
it's the 10th novmerber, There is two people walking down a dark hallway the only light is the light given off by the lava and the fires blown all the way down the hallway there are rooms full of people, torture chambers and bodies the two people keep walking down the hallway till they get too two huge doors as they are pulled open by two orcs on the other side the two people carry on walking and go up the stairs at the end there is someone sitting on the thorne just ahead of the people
Person 1: Lord Liang i bring news of the scout at Dark Shine High.
White Lord Liang: What news do you bring of that place Diao
Diao: Master Yi has got his hands on some more students my Lord
White Lord Liang: Liu what do you think we sould do of this matter
Liu: Father i think we should keep the scout there and see what else we can find out
Lord Liang: Very well is that everything
Diao and Liu: Yes my Lord.
Lord Liang: Very well leave me
Liu and Diao leave the White Shine Lord Liang's thorne room
(mean while in Dark Shine High)
there is a knock on a door
Master Yi: come in its open
Ruki enters the room
Ruki: Master Yi you wanted to speak to me
Master Yi: aaarrr yes i did
Ruki: may i ask whats it about Master
Master Yi: It's about your class Ruki
Ruki: what of it Master Yi
Master Yi: hmm i would like you to be the leader of your class Ruki
Ruki: Me why me
Master Yi: I've choosen you because your the most mature and the oldest apart from Himiko but she does not act like a leader
Ruki: o...ok i understand thank you so much Master Yi
Master Yi: Ok then we are done here then Ruki close the door behind you
Ruki: Yes Master.
Ruki leaves the room and closes the door behind him, as he heads towards the dinner hall he walks into Sukio and Mei, not looking there he is going and bumbs into Mei.
Ruki: Am so sorry
He Looks at the person he has wlaked into and finding out it is Mei goes bright red and gets sweaty plams
Ruki: A...am s...s...so sorry i did..didnt mean t..too.
Sukio: bloody hell Ruki spit it out already hahahaha
Ruki: SHUT UP SUKIO.
Mei starts to blush
Mei: hahahaha it's ok Ruki
Sukio: Soooo where have you been all day big brother
Ruki: hmmm what did you say
Sukio slaps Ruki around the head
Sukio: i said when have you been
Ruki: Owwww that hurt and i went to speak to Master Yi
Sukio: what about??
the three of them walk down to the dinner hall as Ruki is tellin them what Master Yi said.
Ruki: well he just wanted to ask me to be leader of the class
Sukio OMG really thats awesome!!!!
Himiko over hears Ruki tell them that he is leader of the class and stroms over.
Himiko: WHAT WHY THE HELL ARE YOU THE LEADER OF ARE CLASS!!
Ruki: W...wh... what do you mean
Himiko: You just said that Master Yi asked you to be leader of the class why did he ask you and not me
Ruki: b..because a..am more .......... Mature
Ruki closes his eyes and bites his lip ready to be hit by Himiko
Himiko: WHAT THATS NOT FAIR BUT AM OLDER THEN YOU!!!
Himiko truns around and walks off in a huff
Ruki opens his eyes
Sukio: i told you she was mental
Ruki: i think your right
Mei Yep me too.
the three students arrive at the dinner hall and grab some lunch and sit at a table with Osamu, later joined by Li Li
Li Li: hey guys can i join you
Ruki yer sure
Li Li face ligths up and runs over to Ruki and sits next to him
Sukio: hey you two Ruki has somethin to tell you
Li Li: Really what is it
Ruki: can't i tell them later
Sukio: No tell them now unless you want the mental one to hear you again
Li Li: please tell us
Ruki: ok ok well before Master Yi wanted to talk to me and....
Osamu: whos the Mental one
the group look at Osamu
Osamu: Ok never mind then carry on
Ruki: and he wanted to ask me to be group leader
Osamu: is that it
Sukio jumps over the table and slaps Osamu
Osamu: What the hell was that for
Rubbing his head
Li Li: i think its really good i think you will make a good leader
Ruki: thanks Li Li
Sukio: mental one two o'clock
Himiko walks in the dinner hall and as ahe is goin to pass the table
Osamu: Hey again baby hows it going
Himiko: what did you say to me
Himiko slaps Osamu across the face and sits down by Mei
Osamu: Owwwww
Li Li, Ruki, Mei and Sukio laugh at Osmau with two red hand prints of the sides of his face.
Later on that night while the students are a sleep expect Osamu, then there is a noise coming from outside the room, Osamu gets out of his bed and walks to the door and opens it.
as he opens the door a dark tall figure runs past in the dark and darts down anthogth hallway
Osamu grads a brom from the coner of the room and chases after to see who it is but as he get to the end of the hall way its nowhere to be seen.
Osamu: what the hell was that thing
There is a noise coming from above Osamu, as he looks there is red bright red eyes
The dark figure drops down and knocks Osamu to the floor.
Osamu jumps up and start to attack the dark figure with the broom he picked up before just as he goes to hit across the head the broom snaps in half in Osamu's hand
Osamu: Thats not good
He looks at the figure and throws the rest of the broom at the figure and punches him in the body doing nothing to the figure, he looks up to the bright red eyes and the figure picks Osamu up by the neck, then Master Yi walks around the coner with his pipe in his mouth.
Master Yi: Demon put the kid down and be gone
Demon: (deep pitched laugh) hahaha very well
the demon throws Osamu into a wall knocking him out and waking the rest of the students up, as the demon throws Osmau at the wall runs at Master Yi screaming
Demon: DIE YOU OLD FOOL!!!!
Master Yi stand ther and take out his pipe and puts it in his pocket, Ruki and Himiko run over to Osamu and try to wake Osamu up
all the other students are watching the fight between Master Yi and the demon
Just then the Demon going to slash the Master down but he steps to the side and blows the demon thought the wall with a inferno ball sending the demon in to the courtyard, all the students cover there eyes from the dust and the wind off the inferno ball, Master Yi walks out of the hole in the wall into the courtyard
Master Yi: Demon be gone and never return
the demon stands up covered cuts and blood
Demon: hahahahaha
Master Yi looks at the demon and pulls out a katana from his robes and runs at the demon to fast for the demon to react and takes off the demons head in one strike of his blade, as Master Yi puts his blade back a red line appers around the demons neck and starts to drip with blood, the Demon falls to his knees and his head side off and lands on the fall.
Master Yi walks back into the school and walks ovther to Osamu, all the students are in shock for what Master Yi had just done
Master Yi: Osamu can you hear me?
there is a fliker of Osamu's eyes and he opens them
Master Yi: Osamu are you ok
Osamu: where am i?
Master Yi: your in Dark Shine High your going to be ok, Rigth the rest of you go back to your rooms now!
The rest of the students go back to there dorms and back to bed talking about what happened
Himiko: I hope Osamu is ok
Sukio: I wonder why
Himiko: Whats that meant to mean
Sukio: Oh nothing
Ruki: What the hell was that thing
Mei: i dont no but it was hell ugly
Li Li: hahaha yer it was i do hope he is ok
Ruki: anyways we all better get some rest and see how Osamu is in the morning
The rest of the students: yer ok night.
Just as all the other students go to sleep Himiko gets up out of bed and goes to find Osamu in the nurse wing, and sits and sleeps at the side of his bed.
The next morning the class go to see how Osamu is
Ruki: Hmmm i wonder where Himiko is
Li Li: i dont no she might of gone out
Sukio: Or gone to see Osamu
Mei: yer probally hahaha
the students arrive at the nurse's wing and find Himiko asleep in the chair near Osamu's bed
Ruki: hey hows it goin man
Osamu: hey am ok just a couple of cuts thats it
Himiko wakes up and is in shock noticing the rest of her class around her
Himiko: Osamu your awake are you ok!
Osamu: see i told you she loved me hahaha (cough cough)
Himiko: me love you hahaha dont make me laugh
Sukio rolls her eyes
Sukio: so why did you come here then last night
Himiko: because i wanted to know if he was ok.
Sukio: is that the only reson
Himiko: YES!!!!
Himiko gets up and walks out in a mood, just as she leave Master Yi walks in
Master Yi: aaaa Osamu your wake, ermmm students can i talk to Osamu in private please
Ruki: yer sure
the students walk outside and wait
Master Yi: Osamu you was very brave and stupid last night you could of died
Osamu: i know Master am sorry
Master Yi: i believe your close discovering your true Dark Shine power the power of sword and spear,
Osamu: really Master Yi
Master Yi: why yes Osamu oh and i dont think you need to stay in here any more do you
Yi and Osamu walk out together and as soon as they step out Himiko's face lights up and then she walks off.
To Be Continued!
nice
soooooooo...when is the next chapter???i'm,to tell you the truth,addicted to the storylineand i can't repeat can't get enough of it...
"people do not need violence to solve there problems."
im working on it
im working on it as we speak oh and thank you for your comments...i think u are one of me biggest fansyup yup
i would say i am...and i thank you,i got an idea from that...but the storyline is in japan year 17 A.D..it's main character's names are
yoshimitsu the demon
z the great
and yamano the hunter
the story is about how yoshimitsu became a demon and his lost memories.i haven't came up with a name to this story yet but i have the first 5 chapters done...it's in my openion very violent.if anythang i wood say its a 5.5 out of 10...yours is a 12 out of 10 so it doesen't compare to yours...so what do you thank??
"people do not need violence to solve there problems."
coooool
that sounds really really good i would defo read it if it you put it on the site and i love animes with voilence and set in the pest with demons and stuff like that sounds awesome you should put it up on the site some time
will do
i just have to put it in word format.
"people do not need violence to solve there problems."
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did you come up with this by yourself....ifso damn your good..i loved reading it.can you right more.....please?
"people do not need violence to solve there problems."
hell yer
yer i realy did its the 1st 1 ive ever wrote 2 of and yer i would write more or even different ones so u really did like it
1 thang
i have one thing to say......sweeeeeeeeeeet.
"people do not need violence to solve there problems."
wow that's sooo cool we
wow that's sooo cool
we want more!!
thank you
thanks you for the relpy of ans sorry no more till tomorrow so you liked it then
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i thank anyone would.your amazing at wrighting.why don't you go public.i'm behind you all the way if you do.please right more...i would love to read it.
"people do not need violence to solve there problems."